consider me spooked. this was so good. such good dialog and flow. all of it came together so well. i was reading this in my room and it's 1am and pitch dark and i had to put my phone light on because i was so effectively freaked out
this might be my favorite automatic writer story yet. fantastically horrible, visceral, creeping until the moment it explodes. great work, the birds are your muse.
Holy moly. I had a grotesque look frozen on my face for a while there. I really like the present tense during the detective scene and then the past tense after the fact.
I just finished "The Good Egg," in an 18 page flush of not being ablet to put it down. You've got a really classic narrator in this story. Every bit of his dialogue is riviting as the reader waits for what seems an inevitable fate for the policeman. I think this story ranks with Robert Bloch's (or should I say Hitchcock's) PSYCHO. Bravo!!
Really great. impossible to stop reading. will have to read it again a few times... sure im missing some clues connecting the eggs. where did your idea for this come from? my anvil doesnt work like yours. never will!
Thanks, Nick! The idea came from a few places. I’d written a micro some time back about a boy who swallows an egg. I really loved that imagery. I’m also working on a story for an anthology that had a theme that prompted this story, but ended up going with a different story for that antho. But really, it was a lot of noodling until things started to click. It took some time. haha
consider me spooked. this was so good. such good dialog and flow. all of it came together so well. i was reading this in my room and it's 1am and pitch dark and i had to put my phone light on because i was so effectively freaked out
I don’t think there is a better compliment than someone saying they had to put a light on. Thank you thank you! ❤️
Dude, this was great! Perfect pacing, great voice. Loved it
Thank you, Jimmy! I appreciate it! ❤️
Sean, this is next level. the dialogue, the tension. brilliant work.
❤️🙏 Thank you Thank you!
this might be my favorite automatic writer story yet. fantastically horrible, visceral, creeping until the moment it explodes. great work, the birds are your muse.
Yay! Might be my favorite, too. It was tough, with the multiple narratives. It felt like a puzzle.
Loved it.
For a moment there I thought it would go in a completely different direction with Anthony, but now I'd really like to know what he would do.
Thank you! I've considered writing a novel based off of this story. I still might! It's one of my favorites. 🖤
The gut wrenching psychosis of the traveling egg… has a ring to it 😂
Holy moly. I had a grotesque look frozen on my face for a while there. I really like the present tense during the detective scene and then the past tense after the fact.
Thanks, Walker! haha Love to read that. I had a good time playing with the tenses in this story!
I am stunned in all senses, wow that was unbelievably good, thank you so much 😶
Thank you, Caroline. That means a lot to me! ❤️
I liked how it flowed and the scene is quite gruesome Sean. I can see why this earned you more subs, it's really really good. Great piece!
I appreciate you reading my story, Ika. I hope you’ve been well!
You're always welcome Sean. I am still kicking 😊
Visceral and creepy tale. Nicely done, Sean!
Thanks, Alexander! ❤️
this may be your best yet. Awesome stuff
Thank you, Molly! It was a struggle in the best way.
I just finished "The Good Egg," in an 18 page flush of not being ablet to put it down. You've got a really classic narrator in this story. Every bit of his dialogue is riviting as the reader waits for what seems an inevitable fate for the policeman. I think this story ranks with Robert Bloch's (or should I say Hitchcock's) PSYCHO. Bravo!!
Thank you, Sandy! I was definitely trying to channel the Hitchcock energy. It was one of the most fun and challenging things I've written to date.
Really excellent work, Seany, so well written with a delicate prose style fitting the theme so well.
It's almost like there's the ghost of Poe's Tell-Tale Heart buried under the floorboards too. Rich texture and heritage.
Oooo I didn't see the Poe thing until you said it. Thank you, bud. Your words mean a lot. ❤️
This is why I stay on Substack. Great pace, great dialogue, great everything. 🥇
Thank you, Bryan! ❤️
Really great. impossible to stop reading. will have to read it again a few times... sure im missing some clues connecting the eggs. where did your idea for this come from? my anvil doesnt work like yours. never will!
Thanks, Nick! The idea came from a few places. I’d written a micro some time back about a boy who swallows an egg. I really loved that imagery. I’m also working on a story for an anthology that had a theme that prompted this story, but ended up going with a different story for that antho. But really, it was a lot of noodling until things started to click. It took some time. haha
Christ.
Bravo, my friend.
haha thank you! ❤️
Gives superb creepy effect. Jeez sir. Well well well done.
Thanks, Jon!! ❤️