I hate the term drabble (always have) but I really like the story. Great example of what can be accomplished in a microfiction with some effort and imagination.
I remember back in the Medium days people thinking the term meant that the work had to be humorous, like a sniglet. I've got a whole book of 100s (Humans, Being- A Story a Day for a Year) and the person helping me get it on Amazon asked me if I wanted Drabble as a keyword. I declined. Your story is one of the best 100s I've seen in a long time.
Congrats on this winning entry Sean. I could feel that hard swallow as he forced it down. Speaking of which, the story title was brilliant in itself. - Jim
There is something magnetically powerful in this story. but I cannot work it out. the first part is so literal the second so dreamlike and surreal. Has he transformed into a bird? why would his mother wish to scare him off with a spoon and pot? is this a reference to the Chinese disasterous war against the sparrows that led to famine? did he just dream he was a bird because he ate the egg. and didn't you write something much longer and darker about eggs and knives...
Wow, great job. It's been a minute since I've read a drabble..
Thank you, Tiffany! <3
Awesome! This is a very poignant piece.
Thank you, Andrei! <3
I love that you've included a Happy Mondays video. You legend. Brilliant story but I already told you that 😎
Haha gotta throw in some Mondays for the kids now and then. Thank you for your kind words! <3
I will never stop thinking of this little story. It’s so good.
Wow. Thank you, Kait! That makes my day.
I hate the term drabble (always have) but I really like the story. Great example of what can be accomplished in a microfiction with some effort and imagination.
Ha! What about the term do you dislike?
Thank you, Jimmy. I appreciate you reading my story! <3
I remember back in the Medium days people thinking the term meant that the work had to be humorous, like a sniglet. I've got a whole book of 100s (Humans, Being- A Story a Day for a Year) and the person helping me get it on Amazon asked me if I wanted Drabble as a keyword. I declined. Your story is one of the best 100s I've seen in a long time.
Wow. That means a lot to me, Jimmy. Thank you. I can see why you've avoided using the word Drabble based on that.
Great little piece Sean. Congratulations on the win!
Thanks, Angela! I appreciate it!
Congratulations Sean. This is definitely an excellent microfiction. The ending is really fantastic.
You'll make me blush! <3
Congrats on this winning entry Sean. I could feel that hard swallow as he forced it down. Speaking of which, the story title was brilliant in itself. - Jim
Thanks, Jim! It’s a weird one. I was surprised it was picked.
So much in so little. A bit like an egg. Congrats on the well-deserved win!!!!!!
Thank you! <3 It was a fun challenge! 😅
Well deserved sir.
Thank you, Clancy! Something tells me these kids rode the bus to school. ;)
There is something magnetically powerful in this story. but I cannot work it out. the first part is so literal the second so dreamlike and surreal. Has he transformed into a bird? why would his mother wish to scare him off with a spoon and pot? is this a reference to the Chinese disasterous war against the sparrows that led to famine? did he just dream he was a bird because he ate the egg. and didn't you write something much longer and darker about eggs and knives...
Hi, I'm pretty new to Substack. I got your email. Thanks.
I love reading that. Thank you for the kind words!
Thank you! I'm happy that you enjoyed my story. It means a lot to me to receive these comments! <3