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May 2Liked by Sean Thomas McDonnell

Nice plot development here is so few words, and the way you've written this story, it makes the reader go back and review it a few times to truly get the meaning. Very well done! I see why this won!

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Thank you! I'm happy that you enjoyed my story. It means a lot to me to receive these comments! <3

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May 10Liked by Sean Thomas McDonnell

I'm a huge fan of minimalist fiction, and a huge fan of this piece!

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I love reading that. Thank you for the kind words!

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May 6Liked by Sean Thomas McDonnell

Wow, great job. It's been a minute since I've read a drabble..

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Thank you, Tiffany! <3

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Awesome! This is a very poignant piece.

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Thank you, Andrei! <3

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May 2Liked by Sean Thomas McDonnell

I love that you've included a Happy Mondays video. You legend. Brilliant story but I already told you that 😎

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Haha gotta throw in some Mondays for the kids now and then. Thank you for your kind words! <3

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May 1Liked by Sean Thomas McDonnell

I will never stop thinking of this little story. It’s so good.

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Wow. Thank you, Kait! That makes my day.

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May 1Liked by Sean Thomas McDonnell

I hate the term drabble (always have) but I really like the story. Great example of what can be accomplished in a microfiction with some effort and imagination.

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Ha! What about the term do you dislike?

Thank you, Jimmy. I appreciate you reading my story! <3

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May 1Liked by Sean Thomas McDonnell

I remember back in the Medium days people thinking the term meant that the work had to be humorous, like a sniglet. I've got a whole book of 100s (Humans, Being- A Story a Day for a Year) and the person helping me get it on Amazon asked me if I wanted Drabble as a keyword. I declined. Your story is one of the best 100s I've seen in a long time.

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Wow. That means a lot to me, Jimmy. Thank you. I can see why you've avoided using the word Drabble based on that.

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May 1Liked by Sean Thomas McDonnell

Great little piece Sean. Congratulations on the win!

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Thanks, Angela! I appreciate it!

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May 1Liked by Sean Thomas McDonnell

Congratulations Sean. This is definitely an excellent microfiction. The ending is really fantastic.

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You'll make me blush! <3

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May 1Liked by Sean Thomas McDonnell

So much in so little. A bit like an egg. Congrats on the well-deserved win!!!!!!

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Thank you! <3 It was a fun challenge! 😅

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May 1Liked by Sean Thomas McDonnell

Well deserved sir.

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Thank you, Clancy! Something tells me these kids rode the bus to school. ;)

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