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IN-credible. Such an uneasy intense feeling, the latter half where she goes home is like a waking nightmare.

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Thank you, Keith! And thanks again for your great feedback. ❤️

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A horror story told in revolutions. Loved this, Sean!

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Thanks, homie!

btw, for some reason I was up last night thinking about your stories. About your style. You’re so consistently on the mark. And still you manage to be innovative while remaining 100% you.

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Man, this means a lot to me. Thank you. Like the majority of us here (surely), I often doubt my abilities and question my worth as a storyteller. Every now and then a comment like this comes along and it keeps the fires burning. Thank you. Truly.

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Totally get that. That voice in our head is a rascal sometimes. It's either telling us we're the best ever or the worst ever. Never the truth. haha

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Exactly! 😆 You know, when I first started writing, I saddled up with a group of writers who were all inspiring one another to write the weirdest fiction on the planet. We ended up causing enough of a ruckus that we became a recognized movement in the literary world (the bizarro fiction movement). The reason I bring it up is because for the first time since, I feel I belong to a community of writers who are putting in the time and doing important work... and it's different than anything that came before. I'm not sure what it is or how to label it, but *something* is happening here with the fiction on Substack. You feel it too, right?

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I've been mulling this over for thirty+ minutes. haha

Something is happening here but I'm not sure what it is or where I fit in. I'm not even sure what I want! 😅

I'd love to hear more about your thoughts on fiction and the community on The Stack™.

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Exquisite

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Thank you!! ❤️

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This is so twisted and tantalisingly terrifying! As soon as she mentioned smelling the olive wood of her aunt's cross, I started suspecting, but oh my goodness, I didn't realise the entire family would be in on it. This is amazing, Sean!

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Thanks, Nicole! ❤️ It's a bit open to interpretation and I love that. For me, there was one person directly involved (Sticks), but the family did play a part in creating the killer.

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Super well done Sean. The voice is so creepy and compelling. And lord knows I love an unreliable voice like this. Very cool to have another look at this story. This version is sharpened up nicely.

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Thanks, Jon! Adding that prayer to the front really set the tone. I appreciate that suggestion (and all the others)! ❤️

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Sean, I'd almost forgotten about the very unique spells you cast with your writing and your spectacular imagination. My mind was working overtime imagining everything. What a truly horrifying tale. Big hug to you and the family.

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Sandy! I miss you buddy. We should hang out one of these days. ❤️

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I'd love it. You're the busy dad so let me know when you get a break.

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What an incredible story! A douse of pure ice water; I’m still shivering. I will think about this for a long time…

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Thank you, Liz!

I've been thinking about your stories a lot over the past few weeks. You've def played a role in helping me find my voice. I have a couple folk stories in the works right now that would not exist if I'd never read Zimmers. :)

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Sean, that is the bestest compliment ever! It’s wonderful to be able to read and interact with so many talented writers here. I love it!

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This was terrifying. I could hear the eerie voice while I read it. Dark… disturbing… great work like always.

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Thank you, Skyla! I would love to know what that voice sounds like to other people. In my head it's pretty darn creepy, too. ha

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This was disorienting in the best way. It gave the feeling of isolation and the complete loss of reality.

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Thank you! That means a lot to me! ❤️

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This one is chosen!

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🫴🏻

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What am I supposed to say other than this is brilliant, Sean? What can I say that would be worthy of this twisted tale? I love it.

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Hanna! Thank you. You've made my morning. ❤️

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Started off making me think of The Wasps Nest as she was reciting her family members, then slowly progressed into her being the Judas goat. Lovely work.

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Sean, this was absolutely outstanding. Had a blast reading this! Love the repetition to it and the small changes and the imagery woven through it. Great writing.

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That means a lot to me, Roman. ❤️

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Perfection.

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High praise.

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Nailed it!

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Thank you, Sandolore! ❤️

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Loved the changes this was amazingly good, as expected. Very stoked for it. I loved it so much. Would be great in a book of shorts, if you ever publish it in a book let me know. Well done indeed. This would've terrified me as a small child. I love the flow, and the consistency of it. Solid 10/10.

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Thank you, Edith! I had soooo much great feedback from everyone and it was all so different that I didn't even need to choose who's advice to take. 10/10 from you is the dream. ty ty

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GEE. ZUS. This is disturbing, dark, and twisty, and I loved it!!!

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Thank you, Julia! Yay! I’m happy you liked it! ❤️

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