This does straddle an inner mood and an external place/event so nicely. The "hush, hush" is an elegant way to thread them together: first as a thought, then spoken—or at least a thought to a person.
Sincerely, your work is so colourful and the voice is so consistently warm. Mustard. Why has mustard never once appeared in my own work? It's my favourite condiment, but it's SO long since I've even seen it. How long? I don't know. You occasionally allude to food . . . A lot of"taste" language. I've been trying to put a finger on it. Keep food in your stories. I need to start describing the food my characters are eating and what condiments they're using! I'm hungry now.
This does straddle an inner mood and an external place/event so nicely. The "hush, hush" is an elegant way to thread them together: first as a thought, then spoken—or at least a thought to a person.
Loved the atmosphere in this.
Thank you, Zachary! ❤️
Damn. This was stream of consciousness? It's so perfectly worded, I never would've guessed. Wow! You ooze talent, Mr. M. 🔥
❤️ Thanks, homie! It was fun to write. I tried to beat Emil's 15 mins but it ended up around 25 for the first draft, then another 20 mins of edits.
Art School/Birds of Pride were 3 paragraphs originally, and then I just ran it after. Re edit. This was excellent. Nice flash.
Thanks for the perfect three words to kick it off!
You got my winter sad remix but you know what it's great for us horror writers.
Mustard. Good.
Thanks!
Sincerely, your work is so colourful and the voice is so consistently warm. Mustard. Why has mustard never once appeared in my own work? It's my favourite condiment, but it's SO long since I've even seen it. How long? I don't know. You occasionally allude to food . . . A lot of"taste" language. I've been trying to put a finger on it. Keep food in your stories. I need to start describing the food my characters are eating and what condiments they're using! I'm hungry now.
❤️ Love this. I hadn't noticed that I had food a lot, but now I'll probably start picking up on it, and maybe I'll even lean in to the tastes! :)
Do it! Great writing!
life, death and pissing outside, shony trifecta
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Took me to a bunch of places quickly and efficiently. Really great.
Thank you! It was fun to write. Quick and dirty!
Beyond excellent, saying so much more than its modest word count implies. So much more. Brilliant, Sean!
Thank you, Liz! I was trying to say a lot, but wasn't sure if it worked. I appreciate you saying that!
Wow, this is a gloomy atmosphere and quite dark. I can feel how the character show little wariness in his actions, as if accustomed...tough life...
Great short piece Sean. I look forward to reading your story in the books I am collecting this year.
Thank you, Ika! Always a pleasure to have you read my work.
Been a while Sean. I am drowning in TBR but hey, rather that than bore myself twiddling my thumbs. You're really stepping up your game 👍
I'm buried beneath my TBR list--I feel ya! haha
Thank you! I appreciate that!
Great writing!
Thank you!
brilliant.... BUT WE WANT THE REST OF IT WE KNOW ITS THERE!
Thank you, Nick! ❤️
What's left to say??
there just feels like sooooo much story around that moment ... so much more..
"Hush, hush/you just yacky yack all the time...": https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nj9KjKSaDPo
Ohh nice one.